Hello, Birth 101 class staff —
My wife and I attended your screening of Birthing Video last night, and I have some notes.
Protagonist
I hate to say it, but your female lead just isn’t likable. For the film to work, we have to want to root for the main character, but I couldn’t empathize with her at all. Does she really have to be shouting obscenities the whole time?
I know she’s in pain from the contractions and the vaginal tearing, but you should consider giving her an underlying core wound that the audience can find more relatable. Maybe she’s so hot that other women instinctively hate her, like Erin Brokovich. Or she could be super worried about how fat she’s gotten, like Bridget Jones. Or maybe her boobs are too big for regular bras, and she’s forced to shop at a special store? You could add a flashback scene of her trying to find the right bra while a store manager yells, “Don’t stretch out my merchandise with those bowling balls!” That sounds devastating.